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Forever have I wanted to be an author; am I good enough?
May someone please be kind enough to give me constructive criticism, and maybe give me some advice on what areas to improve in? Thank you! :D
This is what I have completed so far. I'm fully aware that it's immensely depressing, but I promise you it's going to soar smoother and more optimistic later on in my novel.
"Done. Beyond done I am of ferociously fighting against myself, against who I am. I cannot function a state of emotional nor mental stability any further than I have for the last eight years. I am exhausted and mentally ill. Where am I leading myself to in this everlasting journey to God knows where? Could I act "cowardly" as innumerable, heartless people call it by overdosing on my prescription drugs of a wide diversity? If I can be bravely honest here, I have attempted such a horrific suicide once before. Yet, like everything else in my damned worthless existence, I had failed like my father when he endeavors to quit taking cancerous drags from his cigarettes.
Far into the dark night scene I can manage to focus my ordinary green eyes on the yellowed colors in the luminous lights from the street lamps. Oh, how gorgeous they are surrounding the Main Street road. A car is racing at 50mph, far too rushing but why should I care? I'm impatiently awaiting the cold arrival of my death either way. If this car doesn't do the job, then I can lie and say I was stupidly not paying attention to what was driving into my dull presence. That I was far too tired, that no thought crept into my mind full of scattered pessimistic words, I was thinking too much - but that I intentionally intervened in the continuous journey they were leading? I could never."
I yearn to improve as much as I'm able, so please any advice would be appreciated and fully be brought into my consideration. :)
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If you have always wanted to be an author, then you are good enough! You have these feelings for a reason. There are people you can pay to bring together the words on your pages but the vision is yours. Go for it and dont stop until your work is out there!!
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Well! That's really drawn me in. It's kind of edgy and it's got a nice economy of words. It packs a lot of information in there without wasting any words. I'm thinking Joseph Conrad? (Heart of Darkness, and many other stories, often short). I'd hate to interrupt that edgy, driving flow you've got going on here by adding bits within this passage. Maybe you could make it into a chapter by initially building up how you got to this place and time and pitch? Then deliver this powerful passage as it stands? Is it good? Mate, it's way beyond what the majority of people could come up with. Ever. But the majority don't want to become authors. Only way to find out if you have what it takes is the time-honoured method of approaching publishers. They have that sixth-sense of knowing what will sell, and exactly when and where to put stuff out there. But I'd say definitely keep on with the creative writing. Hey! I want to hear more of this episode! It's very intense. Too intense to be sustained throughout the whole body of work. Like the best film directors, good authors often build-up tension and then let it ebb away many times, denying the the viewer/reader the climax they desire. Where IS your character going next? Is this the start of their final rage against life? Or will there be a redemption....this time? Is it the bitter end, or just a milestone moment on the road to it? Will the end be bitter, or sweet? You've got me. I wanna KNOW!!
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